Opportunity in store. Open the door.

Opportunity is knocking. You should open the door. So unless winning chocolate is a terrible bore, I remind you  only five blogs down there’s a contest to make you smile, not frown. So after you read my flash fiction here, follow this link to some chocolate cheer. 

And now here it is, without further ado, Rachel Harrie’s first challenge. Good or not, it’s up to you:

The door swung open and children poured through like sand from the seashore. Sand came in too. Yet not one child could shut that door to save old Mom an extra chore.
Where, in this tale, was my man of the sea? Suppose the old sailor went fishing, did he? I could not blame him for fishing each day ‘til he hooked the first one. But they all got away. I hoped he brought supper, for our cupboard was bare, with nothing to feed ten kids gathered there.
Calico cat ran in through the door, and gingham dog’s bone started all-out war. Two hungry beasts ran ‘round the Dutch clock, tore each other to shreds. China plate broke in shock.
A mansion we did never attain. Instead we lived on Lacey Lane—my ten little piggies all in a row, though never like latchkey children, you know. Mine were like latchets of a shoe—which I laced tight to get us through. So I fed them a supper of water and bread, spanked them all soundly and put them to bed.
At last, smelling fish in our shoe-size hut, this old woman thanked God as the door swung shut.
That’s 200 words exactly in amount. Not one less or more if you care to count.
And now, go vote, my readers dear. I’m #192 on the list,  right here.
Then come back for the chocolate below. I won’t let it melt. Are you ready? Go!

Share A Heart

Indie author-friendly freelance editor, children's book blogger for picture books through YA, kid lit, SF/fantasy lover with special fondness for middle grade, pun-loving SCBWI member, meter-maid for poetry and rhyming picture books.


  1. Awesome! And the first poem I’ve seen. Congrats

  2. Excellent job. Heading over to to vote for this one. I love it!!! Congrats

  3. I love this. That takes real effort and as someone who has read all the posts before yours, I really appreciate that. Great Job. Mine is #72

  4. Rhyming is always fun! Great job and thanks for the heads up on the chocolate. 🙂

  5. Oh, I loved reading this! Wonderful job! <3

  6. Brilliant rhyming! I did some of that in my entry, too. Loved your humor and visualization.

    Great job, Sher! Following. 🙂

  7. Wonderful. The rhyme,the story, everything. Yum. Almost as good as crunchy chocolate!

  8. This is my favorite so far. Thanks for a delightful 200 words ^_^

  9. Clever!! The seaside setting really stood out for me!

  10. I love this. I love the first paragraph the most, that part about saving old mom a chore was absolutely delightful. Love the rhythm, unexpected and refreshing.

  11. Very Cute! 🙂 I could only sign in as anonymous for some strange reason but I am not anonymous W Jane Isfeld Still. http://www.janeisfeldstill.blogspot.com LOL

  12. I really enjoyed the rhythm and rhyme and the picture this painted. 😀

  13. Sher, excellent! Lovely lyricism and rhythm in the piece, which is so refreshing after the rest of the entries!

    Hmmm…let me look at the chocolate contest 🙂

  14. OH Damyanti did you really mean the rest of our entries suck? Hope not. This is lovely. Nice poetic touch. Have read a few poems this challenge and they are good.


  15. Rach said in the challenge that we could write a poem, but this is the first one I’ve seen. Good for you for upping the ante! Cute story!

  16. A poem from a poem. Points for originality!

  17. Sher, that was so much fun! I’m running over to like it.

  18. Sher A. Hart, share a heart??? You are so sweet! I’m a new follower, looking forward to reading more 🙂

  19. Very nice! I loved the children pouring through the door like sand.

  20. Sher,

    I’m a judge for the first round of the challenge, and I wanted to let you know that you are moving on to stage two! There will be a semi-final (stage three) and a final (stage four).

    Congrats! And thank you for participating in the challenge.


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